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She fell in love with his vicious lips.
Got trapped into his deadly kiss.
She loved to play with dangerous things,
But didn't know how much pain it would bring.
His smile caught her playful eyes,
She didn't know that smile held so many lies.
He was so perfect, in so many ways.
They're love lasted for only a few short days.
Now she lays,
Cold.
Dead.
In that casket bed.
She never listened to the warnings, or what we said.
You could see those bite marks on her neck by her veins,
I can't imagine all the emotional pain.
I let her slip right through my fingers,
And now her presence always lingers.
She was playful, sweet, and loving, but now that's all in the past.
She went away and died so fast..
His love was strong but his temptation worse.
Then again he had to live with that horrible curse.
He couldn't help it, and I could see the pain in his face,
And now that sweet girls in a better place..
Got trapped into his deadly kiss.
She loved to play with dangerous things,
But didn't know how much pain it would bring.
His smile caught her playful eyes,
She didn't know that smile held so many lies.
He was so perfect, in so many ways.
They're love lasted for only a few short days.
Now she lays,
Cold.
Dead.
In that casket bed.
She never listened to the warnings, or what we said.
You could see those bite marks on her neck by her veins,
I can't imagine all the emotional pain.
I let her slip right through my fingers,
And now her presence always lingers.
She was playful, sweet, and loving, but now that's all in the past.
She went away and died so fast..
His love was strong but his temptation worse.
Then again he had to live with that horrible curse.
He couldn't help it, and I could see the pain in his face,
And now that sweet girls in a better place..
Literature
Insufferable Kiss
Your love was tainted
And I couldn't see it
Now I feel I've fallen
Down into a fiery pit
Why must it always fall apart like this?
You're through holding me down With your insuffrable kiss...
I'll never believe in you again
I'll never cry for you again
I can't take this anymore
I'll never be with you again
My heart has been filled
With the darkest rain
I'm beaten down again
And all I know is pain
Why must it aways hurt me like this?
You through holding me down with your insufferable kiss...
I'll never believe in you again
I'll never lie with you again
I can't take this anymore
I'll never be with you again
Like needles in my
Literature
Our Psychotic Dance of Love
Every sight of you sends me over the edge.
[I'm addicted to you.]
You're like a pill.
[That I keep swallowing.]
Constantly, you seem to draw me in.
[I hold my breath in suspense.]
But then you cast me out again.
[Cut my chest until the pain fades.]
And then we do it all over again.
[Circling in our psychotic dance.]
Literature
It's Killing Me
Oh this poisonous encounter
The lies written across your lips
Will my mind accept
The evil left behind her eyes
Oh this poisonous encounter
The lies written across your lips
Will my heart accept
The emptiness that was left behind
It's killing me
This love that I cannot shake
Suffocating my mind
Only in death do I wake
Will someone please
Rescue me
Tell me that this isn't real
I know it's all a dream
It's only me
I can't shake you from my mind
It's haunting me
The visions that I can't erase
Suffocating my mind
Only in death do I wake
It's breaking me
With you in his arms
At this very moment of time
Sleepless nights awa
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This is sort of a playful poem
Vampires! hehe
Enjoy!
Vampires! hehe
Enjoy!
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This was in my old critique thread. The critique option seems to be disabled. It is a neat poem, though I like the rhythm you have set up - it flows nicely. The break of rhythm in the middle is interesting - the revelation that the narrator is a vampire seems to jump out here. The break seems to emphasize that.
The only "problem" I see (if you want to call it that) is it reminds me a lot of Twilight. Whether that is good or bad is up to you - but it is probably worth noting. Anything about vampires and romance will be automatically compared to that book as long as it is popular.
The only "problem" I see (if you want to call it that) is it reminds me a lot of Twilight. Whether that is good or bad is up to you - but it is probably worth noting. Anything about vampires and romance will be automatically compared to that book as long as it is popular.